These three senryu were just published in the March issue of faileD haikU, a Journal of English Senryu, Volume 1, Issue 3, edited by Michael Rehling.
I hope you are enjoying senryu as much as I am. The world of haiku and senryu is so rich and open.
These are not proper senryu. These lack 5-7-5 syllable structure. The first one has 3-5-2. The second has 4-4-2. The third one has 4-6-6. I don’t know what is this, but certainly not senryu. It’s simple mathematics.
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Oh dear oh dear, someone needs to learn how contemporary haiku and senryu are written. I suggest heading over to Graceguts where true master poet, Michael Dylan Welch, can help you out. 5-7-5 can be used in haiku or senryu, but most modern English versions are quite different. Lots for you to read and learn, my friend. It’s a shame you are anonymous. I would gladly help you understand the beauty and joy of “proper senryu.” Look up the journal, Prune Juice, where you can feast upon the best senryu around.
Enjoy exploring.
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very nice, love the bucket list
my first officailly published senryu happens Apr 1 at Failed Haiku
Cheers
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I enjoyed all three senryu, Mary. The last one was really cute. 🙂 — Suzanne
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The last one is based on a conversation with a six year old student I taught years ago. The kids were doing some end of day work and chatting quietly as they finished up. Out of the blue, he made a statement pretty similar to the poem. It’s what made me love teaching little kids…the fresh and imaginative way they view the world and life. Nothing quite like it. 🙂
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